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sjwilling
October 3rd, 2007, 12:02 PM
Hey guys, I found this vignette/scene I'd written a while ago (about five years to be honest lol)

You think I should turn it round and make novel out of it? Have a read and let me know.

Thanks.

S.J

With the wind ruffling her hair and the heady motion of the rocking boat Jackie grinned, grasping the tiller firmly to force the prow closer to wind and edging the yacht to heel that little bit more.

Across from her Jonnie smiled, revelling in Jackie's excitement which brought a glow to her eyes and a soft delicate blush to her cheeks, softening her lips.

Jackie didn't notice his stare, her whole being thrilled by the contest of woman against waves and wind. It had been so long since she'd sailed and she would take this moment for all she could. Yet she couldn't help the occasional glance at the man before her. Owner and skipper of this sleek vessel. His arms tanned and muscled by many months sailing alone on the seas.

The thought moistened her, causing small trills to rush through her, beating a tempo with the crashing splash of waves which broke against the vigorous bow. The sleek white point thrusting, deeper and relentless into the enveloping sea maw.

Flushing slightly at her train of thought she trimmed the sails, forgotten in her moment of dreaming. Again the boat snapped taut, leapt refreshed against the Atlantic roar, the rush of water thundering as it passed beneath the hull.

She could imagine it now, beneath him, rocking gently to the motions of passion as they slowly rose....

"Jackie are you all right?"

A burning touch sent a shiver through her as Jonnie grasped the tiller more tightly.

Flushing brighter she shook her head to shift the clinging tendrils of dampened hair. How could a man's touch be so virulent, so.... inviting.
"I'm fine," she answered, cautious to keep the passion from her voice.
He looked at her, seeming to read the truth in her words.

"There's a small bay ahead," he indicated to the distant shore. "Let me take it in and we can break for a while. A rest would be good."

Longing to keep the thrill of sailing, yet melting as his touch moved up her arm to ease her gently out of the way, Jackie numbly agreed. Somehow managing to stagger across the cockpit to cling to the rails on the other side. She watched him sail, feeling him as part of the boat, the seductive movements enticing her more.

Lips dry she licked them hungrily, wishing shamelessly it was something else to lick.

The bay was lovely. A small crescent of golden guarded by an irate cliff too angry to let travellers descend it. The bay shielded from the sea by its great curvature.

Jackie tingled, spotting the gleam in Jonnie's eyes.

He knew.

Her legs nearly buckled as he walked towards her, again taking her hand. Gently he pulled her near.

"I want you."

His whisper breathed softly on her neck as he held her near, she felt his hard passion press deep against her, he nibbled softly at her ear and neck. The tingle between her legs spread wildly, dizzying her with its force. Dazed she felt his lips on hers, parted them to feel his tongue explore, gently stroking her lips and teeth. Her breath, ragged, almost non-existence as she died to his touch. Blinded to all but the sensations wrought by his lips and tongue and the hands that stroked gently around her back, her buttocks, gently stroked her breasts. The damp T shirt clinging to the hardened nipples raking them with its coarseness.

Somehow she was inside the yacht, no memory of the journey, just seeing him silently pull her blouse and bra off her. His lips, now scalding, encircled her nipples. One then one. Tongue and teeth pulling gently at the swollen flesh. Desire and lust now raged from her, as she grasped his head, fingers curling tightly in his hair pulling him nearer, onto her.

Grasping her wrists he forced her to release him, then lowered her hands gently to her sides.

Skillfully he opened her jeans, stroking her gently as he slid the zip down.

Her skin became ablaze, tortured by touch, stricken with desire. She
trembled, screamed as he slid the jeans from her, reveling for a moment before sliding his hand beneath her panties. Stroking the fine hairs that settled there.

Jackie bit her lip.

"Please," she begged, "please."

Jonnie smiled gently at her easing the panties from her legs and lingering with his touch along her thighs. Tracing a delicate line of torment closer, closer.

His kisses moved down, surrounding her navel, then moved on quickly, her passion too roused to wait much more.

Reaching the pinnacle of femininity he lowered, breathed. The hot breath struck against Jackie, making her scream, the burning, the touch.

His mouth lowered, tongue slowly entered her and traced a loving line around her lips, exploring every cleft and niche it cold find.

"Please, higher, touch me higher."

Ignoring her pleas Jonnie raised a hand squeezing hard against her nipple sending shockwaves through her, pulsating to and from her secret nub. With his other hand, two, no three fingers entered, thrusting and squirming with liquid sighs.

Jackie bucked, back arched, her clitoris bursting with need.

Then ecstasy, tension, his mouth nibbled at her button, blinding her. Only the feel of his tongue, his teeth mattered nothing, nothing.

"AAAaaaaaaaaah."

Jackie twisted, bucked as heaven roared through her. Her clitoris pulsing, her body spasmed to the strokes of his tongue, his fingers, his breath.
Blind, stars exploding behind her eyelids, the pulses slowly lessened, his fingers left her, his tongue lingered then only coolness and emptiness.

Then his warmth upon her.

She opened her eyes to his kiss, her taste on his mouth exciting her again and his hardness pressed hard, entered her.

He paused, stroking the hair tenderly from her face.

"Shall we start again?" he whispered.

Managing only a guttural grunt Jackie forced his lips against hers. Sucking greedily at him, for him.

Then, slowly, Jonnie began rocking upon her.

CharmedGirl
October 3rd, 2007, 05:06 PM
Wow that story is awesome SJ.

She should definitely say :yes: to starting again :lol:

Dani
October 3rd, 2007, 05:57 PM
That was just awsome S.J.!! :whoohoo:

I think you should have another go at it to see what you can turn it into. I can tell you that I'd read it. ;)

CharmedGirl
October 3rd, 2007, 06:11 PM
It would be a very awesome read if a full novel was to be written SJ so I think you should go for it. :lol:

sjwilling
October 3rd, 2007, 09:15 PM
Cool thanks guys, I'll give it a go then

Sorry to be so late getting on tonight. ISP has been a real bummer

S.J.

Dani
October 3rd, 2007, 09:35 PM
It's okay, we understand! :biggrin:

CharmedGirl
October 3rd, 2007, 09:45 PM
It's cool SJ. Everyone has problems with their internet every once and a while. My MSN messenger seems to kick me off sometimes when I'm chatting with Dani. LOL

sjwilling
October 3rd, 2007, 09:53 PM
That's not your internet kicking you off, it's your topic of conversation melting the wires :LOL:

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 3rd, 2007, 10:07 PM
You're probably right there SJ. Our topics do seem to be a little daring :lol:

sjwilling
October 3rd, 2007, 10:16 PM
But of course it also gives you the excuse to call out that rather nice looking computer repair guy...

:)

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 3rd, 2007, 10:22 PM
I don't know whether he's nice looking I haven't needed to call him out. LOL

NessyPerth
October 3rd, 2007, 10:28 PM
That was just awsome S.J.!! :whoohoo:

I think you should have another go at it to see what you can turn it into. I can tell you that I'd read it. ;)
Oh yeah me too. go for it SJ


But of course it also gives you the excuse to call out that rather nice looking computer repair guy...

:)

S.J.
um ok my computer repair guy isn't that nice looking, hmm perhaps i should try somewhere else Haaahaaaaaa

sjwilling
October 3rd, 2007, 10:42 PM
K, thanks! I'll work a novel around it then

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 4th, 2007, 12:42 AM
Cool! I can't wait to see what you come up with! :biggrin:

CharmedGirl
October 4th, 2007, 12:54 AM
Whatever you come up with SJ it's going to be awesome, can't wait to see the finished product :)

sjwilling
October 4th, 2007, 03:04 AM
All i need now is a plot

Hey, wait, maybe I just need more sex...

Hmm

:lol:

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 4th, 2007, 07:17 AM
Well as long as it's good sex but you will still need some sort of plot :lol:

sjwilling
October 4th, 2007, 08:21 AM
I couldn't have a plot where the guy is always plotting how to have sex?

Hmmmm

:)

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 4th, 2007, 09:01 AM
:yes: you could. The main character could plot out his or her sex fantasies :lol:

sjwilling
October 4th, 2007, 09:30 AM
Whee sex on every page.....

:unsure:

Wonder if the hero would survive it :)

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 4th, 2007, 09:37 AM
Well I'm sure the hero would survive if his equipment was in top working order and wasn't burnt out :lol:

sjwilling
October 4th, 2007, 09:52 AM
Hmmm I could make this a sort of paranormal and the hero is really a form of sea god and is looking for the perfect mate who just has to be human...

:)

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 4th, 2007, 10:05 AM
A sea god that has possibilities.

Sea god...hmmm...for a second there I thought I read sex god :lol:

sjwilling
October 4th, 2007, 10:57 AM
Well, warm, wet...

Hmm same thing really :)
S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 4th, 2007, 04:12 PM
:yes: same thing really :lol:

Dani
October 4th, 2007, 04:30 PM
Sea God...Hmmmm...that has some great possiblities.:roflmao:

sjwilling
October 4th, 2007, 04:41 PM
What was it they said about all those tentacles :lol:

S.J.

Dani
October 4th, 2007, 04:59 PM
The more the better? :roflmao:

I like merpeople more than sea monsters like the kraken, but if you can make it work then by all means go to it. Now a sea dragon would be cool. :yes:

CharmedGirl
October 4th, 2007, 05:05 PM
Now a sea dragon would be cool. :yes:

A sea dragon would be a fantastic idea and he'll need a really cool name to :lol:

NessyPerth
October 5th, 2007, 09:51 AM
well sea god thats different, so he has power over all the Semen??? i mean seamen Haaaahaaaaaaa

sjwilling
October 5th, 2007, 10:03 AM
She was only the Admiral's daughter but she had a Naval base full of discharged seamen...

Hmmm..

:lol:

I'm liking the seagod/dragon myself, I keep thinking of that loooooong tongue.

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 5th, 2007, 05:53 PM
Oooh, it's good to have a long tongue. :roflmao:

CharmedGirl
October 5th, 2007, 06:18 PM
I'm liking the seagod/dragon myself, I keep thinking of that loooooong tongue.

S.J.

A long tongue can be very sensual to many fine places on your partner's body :lol:

Dani
October 5th, 2007, 06:26 PM
Oh, and if the tongue's forked then that can be even more erotic...:yes:

NessyPerth
October 5th, 2007, 10:31 PM
Oh My God, cant take ya's anywhere can we??? i'm almost blushing here :roflmao:

Dani
October 5th, 2007, 10:47 PM
What did I do? :roflmao:

NessyPerth
October 5th, 2007, 10:53 PM
Haaaaaaahaaaaaaaaaaaaa the fact that you have to ask explains alot :roflmao: :roflmao: i luv ya'll so much ;)

Dani
October 5th, 2007, 11:02 PM
*bats eyes and pouts pretty* But I'm innocent...Honest!! :roflmao:

We love you too Ness!! :wub:

NessyPerth
October 5th, 2007, 11:06 PM
innocent????? oh yeah i'm believing that............
.........:nah:

Dani
October 5th, 2007, 11:10 PM
*stomps foot* But I am! I really am!! :whistling:

NessyPerth
October 5th, 2007, 11:15 PM
ok dani your innocent, we can go along with that for a while if you like :roflmao:

sjwilling
October 5th, 2007, 11:44 PM
Of course she's innocent, It was the evil triples

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 5th, 2007, 11:47 PM
That's right S.J., you tell her honey!! :roflmao:

NessyPerth
October 5th, 2007, 11:52 PM
oh my god. this evil twin thing is growing bigger and bigger. now it's triplets??? :roflmao:

sjwilling
October 5th, 2007, 11:52 PM
Hey Dani how close are you to Melbourne, Florida? Seems they might be having a convention there next year

S.J.

Dani
October 5th, 2007, 11:57 PM
I do believe Melbourne is South of me by about an hour or two. I'll check and let you know.

NessyPerth
October 5th, 2007, 11:59 PM
nope melbourne is way across the sea from you dani in a land down under :roflmao: yeah yeah i know

sjwilling
October 6th, 2007, 12:03 AM
Cool, hey maybe I can get to see both Melbournes :)

S.J.

NessyPerth
October 6th, 2007, 12:10 AM
im not a big fan of our melbourne, too cold and grey and gloomy, and from what ive seen quite dirty. Now Perth on the other hand over here in sunny Western Australia :roflmao: now this is the real place to be

Dani
October 6th, 2007, 12:18 AM
nope melbourne is way across the sea from you dani in a land down under :roflmao: yeah yeah i know
Very funny Nessy!! :lol:


Cool, hey maybe I can get to see both Melbournes :)

S.J.
Melbourne is to the South-East of me by about probably 2 to 3 hours. It's not far from Cocoa Beach and Cape Canaveral which are cool places to go too. :biggrin:

CharmedGirl
October 6th, 2007, 04:42 AM
im not a big fan of our melbourne, too cold and grey and gloomy, and from what ive seen quite dirty. Now Perth on the other hand over here in sunny Western Australia :roflmao: now this is the real place to be

Melbourne is a great place Ness and that is where Keri's books are set. :lol:

Sunny WA try coming to Queensland we have the best beaches :)

sjwilling
October 9th, 2007, 09:47 PM
Always wanted to go to Sydney opera house just so I could say I've been.

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 9th, 2007, 09:49 PM
We'll just make a trip of it S.J., cause I wanna go there too! :biggrin:

sjwilling
October 9th, 2007, 10:01 PM
Heh wouldn't that be cool, the CTR Aussie invasion. :)

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 9th, 2007, 10:04 PM
OMG that would be awesome. I love Sydney especially when the football is on :lol:

Dani
October 9th, 2007, 10:04 PM
Yep, it would, and we could pick up Karenne on the way, so she could got too! She'd get a kick out of it. Cheerleader

sjwilling
October 11th, 2007, 09:09 PM
So when are we gonna hold the CTR AussieCon :)

S.J.

Dani
October 11th, 2007, 09:15 PM
Hmmm, we'll have to see when everyone is avaliable to get together. :lol:

sjwilling
October 11th, 2007, 09:18 PM
I'm sure Bec or Ness have enough room in their yard for ooh 3-400 peeps yeah?

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 11th, 2007, 09:46 PM
We hope! :roflmao:

sjwilling
October 11th, 2007, 10:09 PM
Of course the best thing we could do is keep it a secret then turn up one day and surprise them. :lol:

S.J.

Dani
October 11th, 2007, 10:17 PM
That's an even better idea! :lol:

sjwilling
October 16th, 2007, 12:01 AM
Think they can cater for a surprise party of 40 or so peeps :)

S.J.

Dani
October 16th, 2007, 12:06 AM
Hmmm...We'll have to see about that. :whistling:

sjwilling
October 16th, 2007, 12:39 AM
Wonder how much it will cost to rent a small boeing....

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 16th, 2007, 12:41 AM
We'll have to check on that too! :lol:

CharmedGirl
October 16th, 2007, 12:54 AM
My place can't accommodate that many people but definitely get here to Australia when you can it would be great to see you :lol:

Dani
October 16th, 2007, 01:04 AM
Chicken!! :roflmao:Only joking!!

sjwilling
October 16th, 2007, 08:27 AM
YOu can't do us all a barbie :(

We're doomed.

:death:

S.J.

CharmedGirl
October 16th, 2007, 08:41 AM
The best place to have a barbeque is at the beach. You can walk along the sand or just go down there to play a nice game of touch footy

:lol:

sjwilling
October 16th, 2007, 08:48 AM
:whoohoo:

Beach Party! I'll bring my speedos

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 17th, 2007, 01:06 AM
Speedos must be the in thing with the British and all the colonies it controls because you don't see too many American men wearing them unless they are swimmers. :biggrin:

sjwilling
October 17th, 2007, 01:51 AM
:lol:


My wife banned me from wearing them when I moved over here.

Definately a Euro thing

:euro:

S.J.

Dani
October 17th, 2007, 01:53 AM
She didn't want the other women looking at you! :lol:

sjwilling
October 17th, 2007, 02:16 AM
I believe she said something like

"Oh My God, We're getting you shorts..."

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 17th, 2007, 02:27 AM
:roflmao: I could see that happening too!

sjwilling
October 17th, 2007, 02:34 AM
Phew well thanks for chatting to me guys. Blood sugar is much lower and I feel better. I hates those scary moments when it zooms out of control and your body just seems to be heading for overload.

Will try and catch up with some sleep now and check out all these wonderful posts tomorrow.

Thanks a bunches

:)

S.J.

Dani
October 17th, 2007, 02:37 AM
Night S.J.!! :biggrin:

I'm heading that way too! See ya tomorrow. :)

CharmedGirl
October 17th, 2007, 02:37 AM
You're welcome SJ. See ya tomorrow!

sjwilling
October 20th, 2007, 03:04 AM
So what are we all bringing to the beach party guys! Aside from the speedos :)

S.J.

Dani
October 20th, 2007, 10:40 PM
I'll bring the shrimp and tequila! :biggrin:

CharmedGirl
October 22nd, 2007, 12:04 AM
Steak, Sausages, Tomato and Barbeque sauce, Bread, Butter, Drinks that's all the stuff we need plus the food that Dani has already mentioned. LOL

sjwilling
October 29th, 2007, 08:58 PM
Ooops darn I forgot my swim shorts.

Hey did I ever tell you guys about the day I walked out of the pool changing room naked....


:swoon:

S.J.

Dani
October 29th, 2007, 11:56 PM
OMG!!! What were you thinking? Wait...Maybe I don't want to know about it. :lol:

CharmedGirl
October 30th, 2007, 08:58 PM
He mightn't have been thinking at all Dani.

SJ probably thought it was a good idea at the time. LOL

sjwilling
February 2nd, 2008, 05:23 AM
The only reason I discovered it was I couldn't find any clothing to pin the locker key to.

:lol:

And no I'm not into body piercing, especially not that part of my body!

S.J.