Final Tip: One of my favorite ways to write a pitch for a book in a query letter is to use the old formula used by screenwriters for loglines or movie posters. It goes, "When xxxsmething happens, then xxxx something else happens." One can eliaborate a tad, of course. But it's a way to pique the interest of an agent and still have room for the other stuff that needs to go into a query. Oh, strong verbs! (-: