I hope this is the right place to post this...

In the past, I have taken a class on blurbs - the tag lines, the log line, and the 200 word blurb... and I thought I had the concept down, but this current one I am working on -- me thinks I might be a bit rusty... (that's what I get for taking a couple years off from writing - LOL)

I have my main character's goal and motivation in the first two lines (paragraph one).

I have my other main character's goal and motivation in the next two lines (paragraph two).

I have their conflict in the next three lines (final paragraph).

Total word count is 200.

I have a blurb written, but after mulling it over for a few days, I really feel it needs to be tighter... and I am not sure if it has a hook -- (I mean, I think it' a hook, but still...)

It is for an M/M romance.

Is there anyone willing to take a quick peek at it? If so, please PM me...

Any thoughts would truly be appreciated.

Thanking you in advance.